Your honest opinion about this

Today I felt like shit, and I thoughed why shouldn't I post this on forums to see if yuo guys like my work.So lets see!!!

My first ones I apologize for the rough languege used in it!

Peacefull Killers

I'm a walking disaster
A son of a bastard
I don't really give a shit
What y'all thing about my hit
I live my own life
So nobody can compromise

I hate life so f u c k off
Look at me what I've become of
There are four words to say to you NOW!!!
LOOK AT NE NOW!!!

It's all your fault,(YEAH)
You left me here alone
When the darkness fellt
I felt the hate rise upon us!(OH YEAH)
You always liked to back stab me
So quit the fucking thing or leave me!!!

Ref:I hate......


I remember the good old day
When we played all day
I was heart broken when I found out
When you were out the the sonf os teh Satan
I don't care now,you can cry
But I will always fucking spit you in the face!!!

Ref:I hate.....

Okay this was my second where I improved a little bit
This one is called

HATE


I was a kid before you came
Into my life what's now full of hate
Don't give a damn about what you think
Cuz you don't care about me
I'm here, will stay here for ever
Untill, you come and release the anger
Whats chained in my black heart
WHich can be healed by your love.

The things I left behind
Still haunts the big schoolyard
I will keep that empty frame
Because your the one who fits in there

BUT WHAT ABOUT ME
WOULD YOU FEEL THE SAME
OR WILL YOU LEAVE ME OUTSIDE
ON THE HELLS FIRE
WHICH BURNS IN MY INSIDE!!!

What can I do if I'm this guy
Who can't control he's feelings when he thinks about you
DId I love you for what you were?
NO I LOVE YOU CUZ OF YOUR HEART
I can't believe a son of a bastard
Becomes just a big question
THAT CAN'T BE ANSWERED!!!!

The 3-rd one:

FORGET:

Standing alone i realize that,
I AM ALONE!
This wolrd hates me ,
I dont belong
in this place of hate
LEAVE ME ALONE!
I wish someone
could understand
why am 1 so..
HATED


Bad memories damage my soul
These wounds will never heal
Pain is always present in me
This is how i feel
I did waste my feeling on you
Most of the time I bled for you
But you didn't care
Now that's why I hate



I remember when i was young
people would look at me and smile
They would die for me
Would kill for me
Cuz I was hopeless
but now they look at me and think
WOW WHAT A LOSER,
WHAT A WIMP,
My day will come when
everyone will respect me
They will see
That I'm the one you need
In your soul of pain
Where the light faids
and it's getting dark like my hair
which you used to play with
NOW I'M FUCKING HATED
THE SAME I FEEL YOU FUCKING GOODNESS KILLER!!!

Next one:

Better


You're better then drugs
Your love is like fire
I couldn't live without it
My dream is to be
With you in my arms!

When nights fall down
I stair at the dark sky
I watch the moon
And all I see it's you
You in my arms

I don't want to live
I don't want to sleep
Without you next to me
The pain I feel
Flies away from here
When you care for me!!

When nights fall down
I stair at the dark sky
I watch the moon
And all I see is you
You in my arms!!!

I'm keen of meeting you
Everyday when I wake up
I only think of it's you
That is the hard part
Cuz I can't see you
Only in my god damn dream!


When nights fall down
I stair at the dark sky
I watch the moon
And all I see is you
You in my arms!!!

5-th one:
Hate Love

I used to love
when i was young,
now i hate
because im strong,
Now its over
no more feelings
only thing i hear is
my heartbeatings

I'm really glad that you left me
because
you where the first person that i loved hating
now
no one in this world could understand me
I feel
like the memories of who i loved are fading

You made me hate this life
But now i realized
it was a big surprize
Don't try to apologize
It's too late to recognize
the pain you made me feel inside

The hate eats on
my inside, my feelings
But love is worse
slowly its feeding
eating my heart away
now it's bleeding
like it's broken
and now my inside is leaking

No one could love me enough
To heal my heart which is missing
In your eyes i can see your sorrow
But it's too late, you can try wishing...

You made me hate this life
But now i realized
it was a big surprize
Don't try to apologize
It's too late to recognize
the pain you made me feel inside.

It's all your fault
I don't blame nobody
The flame that used to burn
Is now fucking careless
But I don't think thats a sin
For you to fucking swollow
Now the only think i fucking care
Is killing the pain with the god damn HATE!!!

6-th:

Love and Hate

Doesen't matter how hard I try
Still I can't satisfy
Everytime I see you in the light
The only thing I think about is a sample
Of your love in my god damn black heart
WHich I would santify for you and your care
I was to scared to be with you
I know it, it's too late NOW!!!

Hate the feeling, hate the thing
Love the pain, love the seek it
Where ever I go it's just blackness
It's you with your seize looking
I WAS TO FUCKING STUPID
FOR YOUR MOTHERFUCKING FEELINGS!!!!

The first time when I was light
You came and hurt my thoughts
My heart bleeded because of the thorn
That hurt my devil inside
All that hate you felt for this
NOW I DON'T GIVE A SHIT
IF YOU DIE OR SURVIVE!!!!
GET AWAY FROM ME!!!!

Hate the feeling, hate the thing
Love the pain, love the seek it
Where ever I go it's just blackness
It's you with your seize looking
I WAS TO FUCKING STUPID
FOR YOUR MOTHERFUCKING FEELINGS!!!!

7-th:
Love You

When I first saw your beautifull face
I did realize only thing in your eyes
They way you looked at my with it
Made my useless heart beat
I didn't see through a senseless heart
A lost sole that I wanted to heal
For kiss that I used to get
It seemed like 10 more minutes into my life
But now I see that all are just memories
What I like to keep in my shallow mind.


I didn't want this to happen
But I was to damn careless
I did hurt you heart a few times
But didn't ment to do it honestly
I did feel for you and I still do
But now I can reach the things I did back then
I'm sorry, that's all that I can say
But I can do more if you let me back there

I don't know why I had that feeling
But I can't forget the feelings of sickness
I did watch the rain and felt the pain
I did so much to have you back in my care
I will alwaty keep this empty space next to me
Like if it's very important and saint for me
You won't be always searching,you won't be alone
I will be always in your heart where I will love you
I won't get out of this depressive mood for you
Because I can't live with out you!!!

I didn't want this to happen
But I was to damn careless
I did hurt you heart a few times
But didn't ment to do it honestly
I did feel for you and I still do
But now I can reach the things I did back then
I'm sorry, that's all that I can say
But I can do more if you let me back there

8-th:

Pushed away:

I just woke up from this nightmare
When I saw your picture on the walls
Because I felt so awfull for this
I left my feeling outside of you
But still I do love you
And hope you feel the same for me
I'm in a non-stop falling
I can't stop this strange feeling
But you just love to hurt me
And you always ignore me.

You've touched my heart
The feeling I knew I had
I don't forget the times when
I was in love with you
You're in my heart again
And you won't leave i
You're my queen of disasters.

I can't foget the awfull you did
You made me fall down below of it
To bury my head in the truth
How do you do it I always just
Depend on it,I can't control this
You're pissing me, when you killing this
Pain in my heart, the only thing for
I trully live in my life.

You've can't hold on
The pain I always feel inside
Even Jesus would feel sorry for it
When he sees my inside
But honestly leave me alone
TO LIVE MY OWN LIFE!!!

And my last one wrote yesterday:

Valentines Day:
You don't know hows it feel
Feeling this pain inside of me
On this beautifull day
Called valentines day
I'm all here standing all alone
With only the walls around me
When the sky is getting darker
I can feel the pain work lighter
This is teh day when I should care
But I can't cuz nobody is here!!!

I'm standing alone in my world
(ALONE IN MY WORLD)
Once more I stand beside
(STAND BESIDE)
For this broken words in my head
(IN MY GOD DAMN HEAD)
All that I don't wanna hear
Is being alone on Valentines day!!!

I can't believe all this that I see
I can't feel that pain I receive
I just walk with the shadows in the dream
But in real Im here just to wait
Untill the time comes for me
To pass away with the shame I feel
For that life that I lived
And to show you what I was
Before you came and disapear
FOR EVER!!!!!

I'm standing alone in my world
(ALONE IN MY WORLD)
Once more I stand beside
(STAND BESIDE)
For this broken words in my head
(IN MY GOD DAMN HEAD)
All that I don't wanna hear
Is being alone on Valentines day!!!

I can't say goodbye to my life
But I can ignore the feelings left
Inside my chest!!!
I can stand but I will fall
As I did with you around us
I always liked you
But you never seemed to care!!!
I guess I'll be still alone
On my Valentines day!!!

i readed 4 songs x)

good job i could never do better >_>

Thats long XD

lol another dose of puberty i see
or is this work?

well, I write those when I can
I mean, I have to feel like, when I wrote the Love You one I was in love
and when I wrote Hate Love I just broke up with my girl friend
But hope you like them any ways!

Those will be no.2 hits.

Celticfc wrote:Those will be no.2 hits.

what do u mean by that?:\

It's good huni,I cant write that long...and it's even more hard with Chinese.

how about Goldfrapp - Oh La La

I tried song writing too, don't have the concentration for it. You write allot. that's pretty cool. gj

it's hard... i can only come up whit something when i feel shit >_>

*Hule* wrote:

Joel - xzi wrote:i could never do better >_>

Pwnage Huni Keep up the good work